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Soul_Robber



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PostPosted: Mon Sep 01, 2008 6:39:45 am    Post subject: Seeing Double! ~ TNBC Fan-Fic Reply with quote

Ok, this is my first attempt at a TNBC fan-fic.
The story (in a nutshell) is about Jack getting cloned into two parts, his good self, and his bad self. So, he and his good self must stop the bad self from... doing whatever he is going to do... Wish I could tell you, but I can't!

I will be posting this on the main site, but I'll post my chapters here first so everyone can help me edit, change parts, and such. Well, here goes nothing!

Seeing Double!

~Chapter 1: Sunrise~

The moon cast an eerie yellow glow over the Hinterlands below as Jack Skellington stood atop Spiral Hill, his thin, black outline standing out from behind the moon’s bright light. He was gazing out into the distance, in the direction of Halloween Town. A white, ghostlike dog with a tiny pumpkin nose nuzzled Jack’s leg, hoping for a game of fetch. Jack chuckled. “Oh, all right, Zero... Just once though.” The dog barked happily as the skeleton reached inside his coat and pulled out one of his rib bones. He tossed it out towards the sky, and watched Zero chase it, dodging the tombstones and floating over the pumpkins. He quickly came back, and, with the bone in his mouth, dropped it obediently at his master’s feet. “Good boy...” Jack smiled and inserted his rib back in place. He then sat down, scratching Zero between the ears and admiring the sunrise.

~.'.~.'.~.'.~.'.~

Whirrrr… Click. Zzzzt. Sputter… “Infernal contraption…” Dr. Finklestein muttered as he tried to start the large, tilted platform that lay in the center of his lab. There were two long tubes connected to it that went from the machine to two spherical containers standing upright. He tried again, but the only response was a burst of sparks from the main control panel. “It needs more work, I’m afraid…” the Doctor sighed, lifted up the hatch on his head, and scratched his brain, deep in thought. Suddenly, he remembered. “Of course! I forgot one part! The disc gear! I’ll have to see if Jack can get it for me.” He tilted his head, up towards the stairs. “Sally! Can you go ask Jack a favor for me?” Sally’s door creaked open, and she came walking out. “Okay. What is it?” “I need you to go ask him if he’d be willing to get me a disc gear for this invention I’m working on. Can you do it?” “Sure.” Sally replied. “And no wandering off. Remember last time?” “Yes, I do…” “Good. Just find Jack and ask him, ok?” Sally slipped through the giant doors of the lab and headed towards Jack’s house, catching a glimpse of the sun rising near Spiral Hill.
As she reached her destination, she found the gate locked. “Jack must be out,” she thought aloud. “I’d better leave a note.” She took out a piece of paper from her shoe and found a short pencil tucked in her hair. After she was finished writing Dr. Finklestein’s instructions, she wedged the letter in-between the gate’s iron bars. “Done…” Sally sighed and glanced over at the horizon, where the sun was slowly ascending. It wouldn’t hurt to just take a peek at the sunrise, would it? The Doctor would understand. Sally made her decision and slowly walked toward Spiral Hill, her bright red hair dancing in the slight wind.

Ok, it's a bit short, but it is the first chapter. All right, be honestly brutal, brutally honest, or just comment!
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PostPosted: Mon Sep 01, 2008 2:04:57 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

LOVE it! Your writing gives wonderful images!
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PostPosted: Mon Sep 01, 2008 3:07:57 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Thank you! I might be a bit slow getting chapters up, but I'll try to write as frequently as possible!

Hmm... Do you think I should make a PM List? Or just leave it here?
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